Have you ever wondered how to teach students to eliminate wordiness in their essays? Professional writers edit and rewrite texts repeatedly. This post contains four areas to look for when revising for conciseness. Do not have students memorize these lists. Instead teach the concept of eliminating wordiness by going over these examples. Have students look through their writing to see if they have clouded the meaning they wish to convey with unneeded words.
Have students look for redundant pairs, explaining the obvious, using unnecessary modifiers, and repeating thoughts. Teaching students to be aware of, finding, and eliminating unneeded words will greatly improve their writing. Here is an organizer that will help.
Redundant pairs repeat something unnecessary. For example, tuna is a type of fish, so writers can simply say tuna instead of tuna fish. A short list is provided to explain what redundant pairs are. Ask students to name some more. The list could be quite lengthy.
Explain the Obvious
|Have students remove words and phrases that explain the obvious. If the information is already implied, it does not need to be stated again.
For example, Bill sat down in the chair.(Can you sit any other way except down?) Instead, have students write — Bill sat in the chair.
My friend and I split a piece of cheesecake between us.
Unnecessary Modifiers and Determiners
Another mistake students make is to clog up their writing with unnecessary modifiers and determiners. Here is a list to look for when editing writing.
Any particular type of beach chair is fine with me.
The box was completely full of clothes.
Often unnecessary modifiers can be replaced with stronger adjectives. Look at the example on the image.
Eliminate Wordiness – Repetitive Wording
Have students review their writing for words and phrases that repeat themselves in the same paragraph. Here are a couple examples.
I woke up about midnight because of a loud sound that woke me up.
It was a dark and stormy night. During the night. I had a nightmare about thunder and lightning. Suddenly, a loud crash of lightning woke me up. It was a stormy night for me.